lockout deck.....please review

[stimlo]

hey i just came up with a sort of lockout deck see what u think.
yeah i know it needs a fair few changes maybe, but thats what ur advice is for.....plus i came up with this in about 10 mins at lunch. lol

Tribute mosters (1)

Mystical knight of the jackal

Fusion monsters (2)

Last warrior from another planet
Thousand eyes restrict

Monsters (15)

Relinquished x 2
Mask of darkness x 2
Magician of faith
Versago the destroyer x 2
Zombrya the dark x 2
Manju of 10,000 hands x 2
Mystic tomato
Sangan
Spirit reaper x 2

Traps (9)

Timeseal x 2
Light of intervention x 2
drop off
Gravity bind x 2
Sakuretsu armour
Ojama trio

Spells (12)

Black illusion ritual x 2
Level limit area B x 2
Fusion gate x 2
Swords of revealing light
Ground collapse
Prem
lightening vortex
dark hole



im sure there are plenty of improvements!
its ur turn now to help me!
cheers guys!

[Thunder_Struck]

:/

[Topman_2005]

Louis, constructive, plz dood

[Thunder_Struck]

im sorry man had to im constructive every where else :/

[Topman_2005]

lol - fair play

[stimlo]

haha those comments help me soooooo much!

ok i need to make room for:
pog
mst
lightning vortex
heavy storm
dont i really!

[The Almighty Smiter]

Get rid of some traps dude, way to many............... as usual.

[Thunder_Struck]

nu ban, so think again

[stimlo]

whats in there thats on the new ban list?

[_ys_]

You did mention POG so forget that.
MOF is limited to 1.

Apart from that I don't see much trouble with regards to the new ban list.

[stimlo]

modified!!!
what do we recon now?
any better?

[Thunder_Struck]

whats the strtergy of the deck to stall the oponent til he/she decks out lol?? the deck has no main focus play a lock out deck is something that locks sumthing for your opponenet ur locking ur self out with these stalls :/ fair enuff uve got time seal drop off etc, and it could be argued uve got relinquished and ter for field presence/advantage but what happens after that?? the deck isnt stable enough.

[KOCW]

i feel there is too many traps here that don't serve much of a purpose (ie ojama trio)

they r taking up space in the deck which could be used for other cards like Toorential tribute or DDV since u have got zombra the dark in there